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I cannot remember the last time I cried,
flooded and broken my eyes turn inside.
Still there's no beat, lifeless breathing aside;

the last breath of me has finally died.

A nameless face now ruptures my thoughts,
a memory of which I found I have not.
Claiming my love, in his arms I am caught;

a feeling of hunger embedded, grows hot.

He screams a name without any soul.
I sense the place; once a heart, now a hole.
He falls to the ground, death taking its toll;

struggling to stand, his hands reach their goal.

Clutching my face, he pulls me close,
my mouth inches forward, grotesque and morose.
My eyes staring hungrily, he smiles in hope;

his love has now proven stronger than most.

Retrieving a memory, with nothing to say,
I've now grown confused, and push him away.
He clings to my body, his back merged with clay;

forced towards a wall, he stares with dismay.

A name is remembered through hunger and pain,
water creeps to my eyes, still dry and blood-stained.
A memory of love and romance when still sane;

I stare at Chris weeping, tears falling like rain.

As I struggle to speak, my Love only stares.
Sadness comes quickly as death poisons the air,
still I find strength of which I am rare;

"Kill me," I whisper, to a love twas once there.

Chris weeps for my soul, pulling me forward,
kissing these lips that he is now leaning toward.
Quickly forgotten, memories out-poured;

hunger grows furious, now worse than before.

Taking his knife, a man rips me apart.
He slices my throat and blood spreads as art.
Head falling backwards, the smell of death tart.

This faceless man has broken my heart.
:nuu: :happybounce:

One of the first poems I was ever pleased with!



Please view and :+fav: the original preview art, Zombie Romance Image .

This is probably one of my :+fav: poems I have written mainly because I was able to tell a story successfully. Also, because I have a strange fascination for zombies, I've just never had an urge to share that fascination artistically until this piece.

I am thankful for all inspiration that drove this, from the original contest, to My Chemical Romance's Early Sunsets Over Monroeville.

To tell the tragedy of a woman killed by the love of her life has been my pleasure. :bow:

I love critiques on my writing, so please - any assistance is greatly appreciated. Like it or hate it, drop a comment. :tighthug:

:heart: *OfOneSoul

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allison731 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, darling! It's always a pleasure. :tighthug:
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allison731 Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:sun:
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NonsenseDrawing Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Student General Artist
Like my OC, Vigil from my upcoming zombie story "Decay" would say, "God damn, abominations!" lol nice job.
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:giggle: Thank you for commenting, sweetheart! :love:
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heybay101 Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Its a great tale, I really enjoyed it. The only thing I could possibly think of to critique is I was slightly confused by the capitals since there was some instances where I thought you should have capitalized? But other than that I would not really be able to criticize anything.
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for such a wonderful comment! :tighthug:
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heybay101 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
You are welcome :D Keep up the great work.
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Bakape Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Beautiful! I love the flow of this piece.
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! It's one of the only bits of poetry I'm willing to post XD
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