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Jeremy Crenshaw was sitting in the same place he sat every day in fourth period English; far away enough not to be noticed, and close enough to admire from afar. For the last three years their schedules had been almost identical; but somehow English was the only class he had with him their junior year.

Braden Morgan was charming and sweet. He had an air about him that drew people in, even those who were unwanted. Because of this, he was constantly surrounded by his jock buddies and busty groupies. Jeremy could never find a moment to speak; to remind him of when they were younger and when he once admitted that they were best friends.

Braden's body had firmed and his stature had grown those last few years. He kept his head clean with an attractive buzz-cut and enough dirty blonde stubble to remind others of his maturity. He didn't play any sports, so most attentive teachers and coaches ignored his facial hair. Instead he made his mark in art class and drama, neither of which Jeremy had any talent for. He was slowly running out of excuses to see him.

At the beginning of Freshman year everyone knew that Jeremy was gay. It wasn't enough that he had admitted it, but he fit the high school stereotype presented for his age. The vice principle was constantly getting onto him for his shaggy hair. Jeremy took care of his appearance and always straightened his brown curls; even if it made his hair longer than the approved dress code length.

Not to mention that he had never firmed physically as Braden did. Jeremy was well under his normal weight, even for someone who stood at 5'4". He had never been much for socializing either; everyone called him emo, and all the guys called Braden hilarious. But to most of the high school girls and Jeremy, Braden was clever and certainly charismatic.

For now, English class had yet to begin, and Braden's group of hoverers began questioning his costume choice for this year. It was Halloween and that night Stark Haven High would be hosting its annual Spook Dance. Costumes were mandatory; it was a right of passage almost as important as prom night. Jeremy finally saw his opportunity and manned up just enough to be noticed.

"B-braden-" He stuttered, getting the unwanted attention of half the people in the room. Thankfully, he also earned it from the one person he cared to notice. "Do you remember what we dressed up as when we were ten?"

As Braden began to reply, one of his friends, a sort of second-hand man from the basketball team, decided to defend the great actor's honor. "What'd you dress up as, queer? Braden's boyfriend?"

As most of the class began to laugh and those who didn't had to politely stifle the urge, Jeremy still smiled because the only person not laughing was Braden.

Later that Halloween night…

Jeremy wondered if he actually remembered. It was possible that Braden had completely forgotten. It had been seven years ago. Jeremy sat at a circular table covered in bat-shaped confetti and a glow-in-the-dark table cloth in the dimly lit darkness of the cafeteria. Colored strobe lights interchanged positions and all around him straight couples were openly dancing.

He still hadn't seen Braden and was considering the idea that maybe he was avoiding Jeremy entirely. After all, he had openly accused Braden of hanging out with him; a queer. Maybe he had changed more than just physically. Maybe he had become just like everyone else.

As a techno song began to play, the beat quickened and so did the raising of hands and grinding of hips. Jeremy cupped his hands in his lap and pressed his black dress shoes together uncomfortably. He knew his cheeks were reddening and no amount of white makeup could cover that.

Whether or not Braden remembered, Jeremy had held true all the same. He had revived his old costume and even made a few improvements. Black dress shoes, pinstriped pants, a white dress shirt and a black vest underneath. Topped with unskillfully applied makeup meant to give him the appearance of a skeleton. It certainly wasn't exactly what they had worn when they were ten, but hopefully, Braden would get the idea… if he ever showed up.

Suddenly a group of boys began cheering and shouting their stereotypical hoorahs of approval. Through the shaking hands and brofists Jeremy managed to catch a glimpse of what he had waited all night to see. No matter how unkempt or mundane the costume, it was everything Jeremy had hoped it'd be.

Probably purchased from Wal-Mart or some other mainstream store, Braden was sporting a full suit skeleton costume. It covered his hands and feet like an oversized full-piece, footed pajama suit. He had a hood that would have added the skeleton effect, but staying true to their personal history - he had painted his face just like Jeremy's.

Jeremy wanted to stand up. He wanted to speak to him and confirm his suspicions that Braden still cared for him. As he rose to his feet haphazardly his hopes were dashed. The award-winning actress, Andrea Russel ran into Braden's arms and kissed him long and hard. Jeremy watched as Braden gently wrenched her away, smiling. Motioning as if to say, "You'll mess up my makeup."

Still, the moment had happened, and Jeremy had lost hope. He ran to a hallway leading into the school, decoratively blocked off with caution tape and black packaging paper. He wrenched the door open before anyone could notice and fled into the darkness that enveloped him.

No lights were on in the hallways, and all the doors leading into classrooms looked eerie and menacing. He ignored their threatening appearance and threw his back against a nearby wall. Tears welled in his eyes and the thought ran through his mind that his makeup was going to smear.

As the door he had ran through began to progressively creak close and Jeremy was about to be engulfed in complete darkness, it slowly began to reopen.

At first he cursed the hydraulics that kept the door from slamming, but he shuddered when he saw two black feet step into the hallway. They slid softly along the floor until they stood just in front of Jeremy's crouched form.

As the light began to gradually disappear and the hydraulics allowed the door to eventually close, Jeremy looked into the grinning face of his beloved.

"See…" Braden chimed, "I remembered." Jeremy quickly brushed his nose with the back of his hand, and nodded nervously. He smiled halfheartedly and muttered, "Thanks, Braden."

Jeremy shuddered when Braden's smile suddenly disappeared. His eyebrows furrowed, his forehead creased, and his lips formed a stern, tight line. He grabbed Jeremy roughly by the shoulders and lifted him off the ground. He pressed him gently into the wall and stared down at him firmly, but passionately.

Although Braden towered over Jeremy by at least a foot, he still managed to see a hint of desire in dark, gray eyes. "Do you remember…" Braden began, his voice heavy and warm, "what else we used to do when we were ten?"

Jeremy's feet gave way; his muscles relaxed and his heart began to function at a hundred beats per second. His eyelids fluttered and the soft green shade of his irises started to shine. Instead of waiting for an answer, Braden pressed his lips to his.

His kiss was hard and wanted. He drove his thumbs into Jeremy's shoulders and rotated his tongue in his mouth. Jeremy breathed sharply through his nose, and gasped at the ferocity of the other man's passion. He fell into his grip, and allowed his warmth to be drained from him... blissfully.

Braden's hands finally managed to loosen their grip and slowly move upward to caress Jeremy's cheek before completely letting go. Braden backed away, smiling.

"I smeared your makeup."

Jeremy began to giggle uncontrollably. As Braden chuckled, he hugged Jeremy to his chest. Although it wasn't their first kiss, it was the only one they ever truly understood.

Jeremy dug his fingernails into Braden's back, afraid to let go and lose the moment. He smiled, and secretly thought,

"Scariest Halloween ever."
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My first boyXboy piece!



This is my very last minute entry for #ShonenaiWriters' Halloween Contest. :happybounce:

I've never written a romance that was boyXboy love... but I certainly enjoyed it! It's so sweet to visualize these scenes, and I'm so glad that =Starija convinced me to enter. I LOVE THIS STORY! :eager:

Just a note: I'm sure I could have made this story much more detailed. Because I did this in so little time, however; I had to cover the basics. Perhaps later I will go back and edit it, but for now what you see is what you get! :salute:

Please provide any criticism :la:... however harsh. :sniff:

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t-this is your first boyxboy story eveeeer? you are a fantastic and amazing writer! now i have found yet another (you're the third, maybe) writer on the internet who has such skill and perfection in English writing! 8D

i thoroughly enjoyed reading this story. i'm very glad i managed to convince you to enter also! sometimes the repetitive actions and words of "smile" (and its various forms, like 'smiling') were overly used, but it didn't bother me particularly.

your 'vision', the way you described the scenes and story, were very amazingly written and shows us readers the actual showing instead of just telling, as some authors prefer. for me i'm perfectly fine with whatever, but i loved your showing in this case. the originality was pretty interesting with the "scariest Halloween ever" idea, but Braden and Jeremy being old friends who love each other is something that's usually seen a lot.

i hope you continue to share dA a lot more of your writing, and i'll look forward to reading more from you. :heart: i sure hope you've published books already??
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Luna-Bell07 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Student Writer
The world you created is a fun, extraordinary place. The introduction you wrote was the perfect lead-in into your first boy's love piece. We were introduced to Jeremy and the others in an enchanting way.

You have a bewitching writing style that is so easy to love!
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much, darling! You are too kind. :iconsupertighthugplz:
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x-shadowed-dawn-x Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012   Writer
;) Wasn't in the winnings - but now I can at least show how much I did adore this piece.

Although it was rushed and last minute (as it is obvious by rather minor mistakes here and there) - it did make an impact. I love old friend/lover fiction, just something about the connection that's already there. I especially loved how you broke that bond and reconnected it. Despite being such a simple idea behind the story, it was beautiful to read. The emphasis on certain phrases and words did help get your point across and make those words/phrases feel much more prominent.

Personally, I enjoy more in depth detail - but then again that's obviously not your ground into your style so it's no big deal there. What you did have was well wrote. You didn't seem to repeat your descriptive words nor run off. :'D Please do keep up the good work, for if this was last minute - I'm sure you're more timely pieces are even better!
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you for such a lovely comment! I've noticed a few mistakes - now that I'm re-reading. :no: I'll be correcting them now that the contest is over. I am so glad you enjoyed the story itself. I always find it difficult to fit an entire story into so few words... I've gotten better at it but I agree that it does lose helpful details in the process. :sniff:

Thank you once again, I truly appreciate the feedback. :tighthug:

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x-shadowed-dawn-x Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2012   Writer
You're welcome. That's alright though - they're always going to be some. I completely agree. The less words, the more challenging.

:huggle: But you're very welcome~ :heart:
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AidaLily Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
I enjoyed it a lot. Braden is a bit of a confusing character and while I knew he might feel the same, I partially felt he might be toying with the other, but I read into things too much. >.<

Then again I always read into things too much when one character seems more popular than the other. lol. I would like to read more of them together though. I think it would be very enjoyable to see where their relationship ends up going.

Your first boy x boy piece?! Awesome. Welcome to the wonderful world of male x male pairings. Even if you never write another one, at least you wrote this one. Thank you very much.
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the lovely comment! :love: It does make me sad that Braden seems unlikable - but the reason he's so popular is that he is a very good person. :nod: Perhaps I'll go back and edit and emphasize on that more. :no: Thanks again sweetheart! :tighthug:
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AidaLily Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
Not a problem. :)

If you would like a bit of advice (as in you can ignore the next part if you want..lol), don't fret too much over a character being unlikeable and like any other story you may write (I will go check. *nods*) just make sure when you read it to yourself that it comes off the way you wanted it to.

He did come off as a decent person. For me it was just the way he asked if the other remembered that they had kissed before almost like it was more something they did then him returning the other's feelings.

However, as I said... I look into things too much. XD. Don't feel bad. I have a tendency to have to explain most of my stories and you don't so that is a plus! :)
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad he did come off decent enough. And the whole... if he remembered the kiss... that was my own sensual jab I had to throw in there. The whole scene was so sexy in my mind. :evillaugh:

And quite recently I've been doing a bit of explaining. Mostly on one story though. Either I can't seem to explain things very well... or... no one understands me. :blush:
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AidaLily Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2012
Ah well there is nothing wrong with not being easily understood. Sometimes that just makes stories much more fun to write. My entry last year was called "Promises" and that one is and isn't confusing.

However, yes he did come off decent enough and the scene definitely had that sensual tone to it. As I said, I would like to read more of those two.
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